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13rd January 2005
(....Employer's name....)
(....Employer's address....)

Dear Mr (...Employer's Surname...),

Application for the Post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor

With reference to your advertisement on (xxxxxxxxxxxxx) , I am writing to apply for the post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor

I am the graduated student studying Surveying (QS) in the City University of Hong Kong. In my junior secondary school life, I participated in several extra-curricular activities including basketball team and the badminton team. In the summer holiday after the HKCEE, I took part in the school campaign to go to the primary school as a student helper to support the primary student about their homework. In the later summer holiday, I undertook training in Volunteer Orientation Programme and became a volunteer at Castle Peak Hospital, which required taking care of patient, general office works and working as a cash checker. After finishing the HKALE, I work in a bookshop as a salesman. Details please see the enclosed resume.

I am confident that I will be able to work independently under busy environment. In my university courses, I have already learned about different types of job relating to the quantity surveying field including tendering, interim payment and claims. I hope all these make me match your criteria.

I look forward to your response. Thank you.

Yours sincerely,
(name)



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引用第0樓超迪仔2006-06-03 04:17發表的“各位英文強人,幫我改改封信~”:
Dear Mr (...Employer's Surname...),
Application for the Post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor
With reference to your advertisement on (xxxxxxxxxxxxx) , I am writing to apply for the post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor
I am the graduated student studying Surveying (QS) in the City University of Hong Kong. In my junior secondary school life, I participated in several extra-curricular activities including basketball team and the badminton team. In the summer holiday after the HKCEE, I took part in the school campaign to go to the primary school as a student helper to support the primary student about their homework. In the later summer holiday, I undertook training in Volunteer Orientation Programme and became a volunteer at Castle Peak Hospital, which required taking care of patient, general office works and working as a cash checker. After finishing the HKALE, I work in a bookshop as a salesman. Details please see the enclosed resume.
I am confident that I will be able to work independently under busy environment. In my university courses, I have already learned about different types of job relating to the quantity surveying field including tendering, interim payment and claims. I hope all these make me match your criteria.
I look forward to your response. Thank you.
Yours sincerely,
(name)


勁人就唔敢當, 不過見路過就幫你試試

注意有顏色的地方

I am keenly interested in applying for the captioned position with your Practice and I now attach my resume for your kind consideration

For now I should be extremely grateful if you would kindly consider my application and grant me an interview. Please feel free to contact me at XXX In the meantime I look forward to hearing from you. I will be available to commence work with you XXX.

中間好似好"多野", cut down d 會好d

Good luck~
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引用第0樓超迪仔2006-06-03 04:17發表的“各位英文強人,幫我改改封信~”:
13rd January 2005
(....Employer's name....)
(....Employer's address....)
Dear Mr (...Employer's Surname...),
Application for Assistant Quantity Surveyor
With reference to your advertisement on (xxxxxxxxxxxxx) , I am writing to apply for the post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor
I graduated from the (Program/Department) in the City University of Hong Kong. During my study, I have learned various job related knowledge in quantity surveying field including tendering, interim payment and claims. (include d咩記住要寫d係份工個requirement寫要有既野)
In my secondary school life, I participated in various extra-curricular activities including working as student tutor in primary school and volunteer worker at Castle Peak Hospital which I need to take care of patient and provide clerical support. In addition, I have worked as salesman in book store during summer holiday. Through these experiences, I appreciated the importance of team work and improved by communication and interpersonal skills with people from different background. (p.s. 我唔熟你果行,你自己吹d有關係既野啦,記住要吹d job ad有寫既requirement落去)
I believed that my educational background and experience has enabled me to work independently in fast moving environment, and I am confident that I can make a strong contribution to your company.
I look forward to have an interview with you to further discuss my suitability for your company. Thank you for taking time to consider my application.
Yours sincerely,
(name)

睇下咁會唔會好d
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唔該哂!!!!!!
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13rd January 2005
(....Employer's name....)
(....Employer's address....)

Dear Mr (...Employer's Surname...),

Application for the Post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor

With reference to your advertisement on (xxxxxxxxxxxxx) , I am writing to apply for the post of Assistant Quantity Surveyor

I am the graduated student studying Surveying (QS) in the City University of Hong Kong. In my junior secondary school life, I participated in several extra-curricular activities including basketball team and the badminton team. In the summer holiday after the HKCEE, I took part in the school campaign to go to the primary school as a student helper to support the primary student about their homework. In the later summer holiday, I undertook training in Volunteer Orientation Programme and became a volunteer at Castle Peak Hospital, which required taking care of patient, general office works and working as a cash checker. After finishing the HKALE, I work in a bookshop as a salesman. Details please see the enclosed resume.(可不要) (+有關你學果科野)

I am confident that I will be able to work independently under busy environment. In my university courses, I have already learned about different types of job relating to the quantity surveying field including tendering, interim payment and claims. I hope all these make me match your criteria. (+同工作要求的重點)

I look forward to your response. Thank you. (+attach左resume同講希望比機會interview)

Yours sincerely,
(name)

我建議你上網搵多幾篇參考下...
唔關英文事,開格式內容事...

當然寫好都要再三check下啦
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引用第4樓ballballfull2006-06-03 19:41發表的“”:
13rd January 2005
(....Employer's name....)
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Dear Mr (...Employer's Surname...),
.......

你指紅色果度成段唔要改過?
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只看該作者 6  發表于: 2006-06-03
果般野根本就係resume入面,唔洗重複...

除非你想講係 a事上學左b,c,d等有助呢e工作

搵多幾篇參考,好o既就抄,唔好就del,加加埋埋都ok
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引用第6樓ballballfull2006-06-03 23:26發表的“”:
果般野根本就係resume入面,唔洗重複...
除非你想講係 a事上學左b,c,d等有助呢e工作
搵多幾篇參考,好o既就抄,唔好就del,加加埋埋都ok

好~~